tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5270580361314886328.post3417187550097023480..comments2023-10-28T08:01:12.479-07:00Comments on B-E Advanced Placement Language 2007: A Proposal to Stop the Childhood Obesity Epidemicjklassenhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07810324793403821466noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5270580361314886328.post-34409498689704055372007-12-30T14:13:00.000-08:002007-12-30T14:13:00.000-08:00Well done! I was hopping that some one would addre...Well done! I was hopping that some one would address this topic and you sure did!. Very well written; you covered every aspect of the obesity problem. I don't know about everyone else, but i would rather exercises then go to one of your schools.Brandon Rogershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12412364404179054979noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5270580361314886328.post-87029084811110857352007-12-09T21:00:00.000-08:002007-12-09T21:00:00.000-08:00I really loved your essay. The way you completely ...I really loved your essay. The way you completely went over the top with your proposed solution really drew attention to the issue at hand. What you proposed was so drastic and so strict that it helped to show just how big of an issue this is and how it needs to be taken much, much, much more seriously then it currently is. I completely agree with you that obesity is a large problem within our country. My favorite part of your piece is how you said even when the kids are at home during vacation they still can't watch television or play video games. I felt this really helped to show just how seriously this issue should be taken. Wonderful job!Melissahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00468928780928391979noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5270580361314886328.post-5521367358874421822007-12-09T19:06:00.000-08:002007-12-09T19:06:00.000-08:00NicoleYou did really well in showing obesity as a ...Nicole<BR/>You did really well in showing obesity as a real problem. You supported your diagnosis well with facts in the beginning and your outrageous proposal made me think how could this problem actually be solved? You were able to create a similar effect to Swift's essay.Chasinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00288907646150442247noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5270580361314886328.post-55126884347511110912007-12-09T17:46:00.000-08:002007-12-09T17:46:00.000-08:00Nicole- I thought you really did well in satirizin...Nicole- I thought you really did well in satirizing a topic such as this one. I thought it was hilarious that each child had to see a psychiatrist at least once a week, since you could imagine that a school such as the one you are proposing would probably be difficult to handle. I liked how every time you mentioned an unhealthy food you usually accompanied it with an adjective such as "glutinous" and "sugar coated." Overall, great job.kelsiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04921437332400051171noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5270580361314886328.post-64090871555110031462007-12-09T16:06:00.000-08:002007-12-09T16:06:00.000-08:00Nicole~The ridiculousness of your proposal definit...Nicole~<BR/>The ridiculousness of your proposal definitely is able to emphasize the obesity problem we have in our country, as well as the over-the-top health programs that have been suggested to fix it. Your piece is very cleverly written and effective, and the only other thing I would have liked to have seen in your proposal would be some actual suggestions on how to fix the problem, like those Swift includes at the end of his essay. But overall it was an excellent satire which really brings to light a rapidly growing issue that we have yet to find a decent solution to.Skye Olsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18199391550361382634noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5270580361314886328.post-23481020404551193902007-12-09T15:16:00.000-08:002007-12-09T15:16:00.000-08:00Nicole-When you first told me of your proposal I d...Nicole-<BR/>When you first told me of your proposal I didn't know how you were going to make it sound like there was a possibility of it happening, but you did it! I loved how you decided on making the kids do a food diary over vacation. I also liked how you included statistics and such on obesity.Rachellehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05790631050032349431noreply@blogger.com